1. Cathy:
Content:
About three months ago, a newly emerged disease called H1N1 was a threat to people in America. Due to the rise of fatality, scientists and doctors tired hard to find cure for patients. Unfortunately, the virus is so infective, and the drugs couldn't kill the virus efficiently. The virus now is a threat to everyone on the earth.
For the sake of saving their own life, people started to wear mask in order to protect themselves from being infected. Especially for kids, they have to wear a mask all the time if they find themselves or others having a cough. Patients who are in serious conditions have to be quarantined, and their family and friends who bring flowers to visit them can only see them through a thick glass.
We all hope those patients who are in sericous conditions can recover soon.
Cathy's questions:
Do I use the tense correctly?
Giang's answer:
yes
Cathy's ideas:
I should illustrate more details in the content.
2. Giang:
Content:
About three months ago, a newly emerged disease called H1N1 came to threathen people in America. Due to the rise of fatality, scientists and doctors tried hard to find cure for patients. Unfortunately, the virus is so infective, and the drugs couldn't kill the virus efficiently. The virus now is a threat to everyone on earth.
For the sake of saving their own life, people started to wear mask in order to protect themselves from being infected. Especially for kids, they have to wear a mask all the time if they find themselves or others having a cough. Patients who are in serious conditions have to be quarantined, and their family and friends who bring flowers to visit them can only see them through thick glass.
We all hope those patients who are in serious conditions can recover soon.
For the sake of saving their own life, people started to wear mask in order to protect themselves from being infected. Especially for kids, they have to wear a mask all the time if they find themselves or others having a cough. Patients who are in serious conditions have to be quarantined, and their family and friends who bring flowers to visit them can only see them through thick glass.
We all hope those patients who are in serious conditions can recover soon.
Giang's questions:
No
Giang's ideas:
pay more attention to spelling
I think the sentence "Due to the rise of fatality, scientists and doctors 'tired' hard to find cure for patients" should be "Due to the rise of fatality, scientists and doctors 'tried' hard to find cure for patients". Right?
回覆刪除Yes, it seems that there is a typo.
回覆刪除In the second para., some of the sentences are written in present tense which is not consistent with the prior part.
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