Example for collaborative writing

Sasha is the first editor and Sheila would simply edit the first draft or write her own ideas



1. Sasha:
Content:
Yesterday, Candy, Janice, Cathy, and I plan to go picnic in the park by bus. The weather was fine but it rained when we were on the way. When we got there, it stopped raining. Everyone brought so many kinds of food. I especially like delicious sushi made by my mom. We all had fun yesterday and we will arrange another picnic meeting next Tuesday.

Sasha's Questions:
I am not sure the past tense of plan.

Sheila: planned.


Sasha's Ideas:
Perhpaps we can just mention the coming of typhoon.

Sheila: ok.


2. Sheila:
Content:
Yesterday, Candy, Janice, Cathy, and I planned to go picnic in the park by bus.
The weather was fine but it rained when we were on the way due to the coming of typoon. When we got there, it stopped raining. Everyone brought so many kinds of food. I especially like delicious sushi made by my mom. After lunch, it rained heavily so we had to leave. Even though the weather isn't good, we all had fun and we will arrange another picnic meeting next Tuesday.

Sheila's Questions:
Do you think this revision is ok?
Sasha: I like this revised version.

Sheila's Ideas:
Nope.

Final version:
Yesterday, Candy, Janice, Cathy, and I planned to go picnic in the park by bus. The weather was fine but it rained when we were on the way due to the coming of typoon. When we got there, it stopped raining. Everyone brought so many kinds of food. I especially like delicious sushi made by my mom. After lunch, it rained heavily so we had to leave. Even though the whether isn't good, we all had fun and we will arrange another picnic meeting next Tuesday.